지난주에 이어 이번 주에도 7학년 학생이 CST 라이팅에서 ‘Joining Volleyball Club will help you become a better player and teach you better sportsman-ship’이라는 주제로 쓴 설득문(Persuasive Writing)을 살펴보겠습니다. 글의 주제는 발리볼 클럽에 가입하도록 유도하는 글을 스포츠맨십과 보다 좋은 운동기술을 향상을 중점으로 설득하는 글이었습니다.
이번에 제시하는 글은 4점 만점에 2점을 받은 학생의 글로 글의 구성과 주제 등 여러 가지가 취약한 글이라 할 수 있겠습니다. 지금껏 읽은 글들과 비교해 무엇이 부족한지, 자녀라면 어떻게 쓸 것인지를 이번 글을 읽고 자녀와 함께 이야기를 나눠 보십시오.

my name is _____ and I am in 8th grade. I am inASB and other criculatory school activities. I am looking for students with 3. 5to 4.0 grade point averages who would like to join my club. The club I am going to start is called the F.F.H. club (Food For Homeless) club to be exact. In this club, we will raise money and even donate money or food (perhaps canned food would be best) from ourselves and others.
I am trying to make a meaning to the world and trying to tell them that this world (including us) really do care for others and the struggle people and kids of all ages are going through.This club needs very kind and elegable studzents inbetween ages 12-14, in grades 6th through 8th. Club sessions will beon Mondays, Wednsday’s, and Thursdays. Saturday’s and Sunday’s will be optional. We will be opened from 4:00 pm to 7:00 pm and will have to work hard for the whole three straight hours. Snacks and a dinner which will include something different every club session, including (Taco Bell, Burger King, Albertoes, etc.) will be provided by ___.M.S.. Sign up’s start on Tuesday, December 4 and will go on until December 14 which will give you 10 days to talk to parent and get other students to join.
Please notify other ___.M.S. students about this add, and please join ___ for the homeless. Further information about when it all starts will be provided after sign ups have ended. It will be lots and lots of fun.

Sincerely, your Friend,
_________, ASB
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